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Friday, 17 May 2019

The Lake of Kazuri

One frightful morning on the rough surface of lake Kazuri a woman called Entu was close to
giving
birth to a newborn baby these native americans were on a kunu sailing across this massive
Lake of Kazuri. Chumoto Entu’s husband was encouraging and empowering Entu to be strong.
But little did they know that water was flowing thru there kunu. Chumoto and Lia the two strong
men on board were panicking as Entu was in deep pain a minute flew by and Entu’s first born
had arrived. The men were still panicking tho including Entu now as she just realised what had
been happening. The men were gushing out water as fast as they possibly could one bucket
after another after another, until the born child laughed at something in the water Entu looked
there were little creatures quickly swimming up to the boat, Entu reported to Chumoto and Lia
that there might be a possible threat Chumoto and Lia paid no attention and kept removing
watefrom the kunu 30 seconds gone past and every on board the boat could feel themselves
rising up into the air everyone looked down to see 28 little creatures lifting there kunu up and out
of the water. Everybody was surprised at the site of a newborn and mysterious creatures that had
emerged out of the water of lake Kazuri at the time of need. This story has been said to children
and many others, that these creatures are still living under the water of the this legendary lake.

1 comment:

  1. Great story it was interesting and i wanted to see how it ended.
    I think you could work on detail and punctuation.
    Kate

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